Martial World: A Saiyan Immortal

I very much like the premise of this story. but I've seen this idea done before by other authors and let's just say that all the ones I've read so far were terrible. the authors that have tried this idea before usually messed it up by make the character use the cultivation world form of mystical energy and story's are usually very fast which creates a whole list of other issues. so far in your story I liked some of the jokes you made. I also feel it's too early to judge whether you're fic is good or not so I'm just going to leave it at 4 stars. I hope that's what story ends up being better than the ones I've seen so far with this exact same premise

Very good writing, nice jokes, good plot, likeable character. Please continue writing this ---------------------------------------------------------------- :)

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