Review Detail of IWantToBeBuddha in Lookism [Masterpiece]

This fanfiction is very mediocre. It's extremely edgy and cringe all around. The constant laughing from the protagonist is unnecessary and contributes to this childish and amateurish feeling when reading this. The flow of the story is unnatural and forced when the protagonist converses with the side cast. A great example is when the main character invites Zack for training. It's going too fast for anyone to truly savor the barebones of any good qualities of this work. An instance of this is when the main character becomes strong enough with the fat body to rival and outdo the likes of Zack. I get that with the aid of the boons, Fat Daniel will get stronger quickly. The speed of growth is still too much, and it broke the immersion for me. Don't get me started on the grammar.