Review Detail of LittleRedsWolf in Mass Effect SI - The Afterlife

Reads like it was written by bad AI on PCP. Can't figure out who is speaking to whom in some chapters. MC almost seems manic. MC spent the 4th chapter talking to himself in his head (I think). I found myself skimming the 4th chapter after re-reading the same couple of paragraphs and trying not to lose interest. Good concept, confusing execution. Hope the next couple of chapters are better.