Review Detail of Kari_Chan in The Devil's Ember

Hey girlie, I just want to let you know you have an awesome story going on. I’m very interested and intrigued by the characters and the storyline and of course the plot. There are some ways you can write your narration between ember much more easier to understand. I felt that you use the correct words perfectly, but you put it in the wrong position so then it gets confusing. Some things that you interpret can be wordy like for example. When you mentioned about Ember’s dress, being drenched, and you said you were trying to relate that to goosebumps. Which you can, but instead of explaining that you can just say that she felt goosebumps. or continue the sentence and word it differently. You are a very good writer already, I really like your story and I want to continue reading it. But just a tip don’t kill yourself putting too many words to explain what you want for the readers. you are already doing such a good job, especially from your other novels. Lastly, I also rated your road background lower, but honestly there’s not enough chapters to show that, so please don’t take offense. I’m actually planning to come back and write your novel again once you have more chapters. (I promise it will be a shorter review 😂) I hope I was helpful to you have a wonderful day❤️