Review Detail of Brian_Hanes_117 in Mad House

The writing is good, but the formatting could use some reform. Grammar seems to be up to standards for the most part and updates are steady. There is some conflict to keep the audience engaged. I'd like to see a bit more description in terms of the setting, background, visual sense, and whatnot. I invite the author to check out my adventure fanfic "Avatar: The Vindicated Avenger (TLV)". It is a spinoff of "Avatar: Macai's Journey (AMJ)". It might help to read the first 1-3 chapters of AMJ first, but I really don't think that's necessary to enjoy this one.