Review Detail of Kari_Chan in The Star God Of Ancient.

I have been reading your novel, and I quite like it. The story building is beautifully written, and how you describe areas around your characters very good. And I actually quite enjoy the conversations between Linda and Caroline with Eric. It’s quite entertaining to read. I would advise you though to write more dialogue, then description to make the book more alive just like someone once told me. One thing you should be more concerned about, is the pacing in your story. I understand you were trying to build it up by chapter 13, which I noticed. But I felt that it could have already picked up when you mentioned about the skull on the door. I can’t remember which chapter it was I believe it was five. But that alone sparked, some interest. There could’ve been more done with that, by building it up from chapter 5, then hammering down with more action between chapters 13 to 18 if you wanted.