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You know those super awkward MCs written by white people? The type that constantly asks himself questions inside his own head or even out loud talks to himself? Take that MC and add a portion of depression and a hint of virtue signaling and you will get the MC of this story. In the beginning you won't really notice but as the story goes on it becomes very annoying.
FrostBitten (Percy Jackson Fanfic)
CarlosDr3vna
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i don't want to read this again just for a good example. All I will say is that inner thoughts should serve narrative purpose, not waste time. They shouldn't be stuff like "Hey if I do this and that then I can get this and that" or "Maybe I could get this if I do this?" instead it should be in the moment things that describe and narrate like "I could see the hatred for me in his eyes" or "I was glad to see all those years spend training weren't wasted". The more I think about it the more I am convinced that thoughts in general should be rare. You can do most of the story telling just by narrating things in small summaries like "The last few day were spend doing this" or "In the future he hoped he could do that" or "His blade narrowly missed my eye".
ShaftOfAntimatter:I don't quite understand. Could you give an example of what makes it so bad? Because, as I'm aware and from my own experience what ruines stories is the lack of inner monologues as they tend to be the biggest indicators of their thought process and intelligence to better understand the character. That's why I love novels that tend to have the main characters pov or at least multiple pov's. And about the depression... How exactly is that a bad thing? As long as he genuinely has depression that makes sense it in no way ruins his character. It might be a bit generic but that's not a bad thing if it's done well. - With love ShaftofAntimatter 🙃
CarlosDr3vna:White people??? I'm half Mexican, half Hispanic. Also not sure what the race of the author has to do with writing a story.
But you were wrong. I'm not white. Also, dug through your comments. You seem to have a hatred towards Indians and have a habit of bringing race into matters that don't entail it. A racist pretty much.Ergo, this will probably be my last comment to you since I don't argue with illogical people. Apologies that you didn't enjoy the novel. I hope you find a better read elsewhere.
InternetSaint:I call it as I see it.
CarlosDr3vna:But you were wrong. I'm not white. Also, dug through your comments. You seem to have a hatred towards Indians and have a habit of bringing race into matters that don't entail it. A racist pretty much.Ergo, this will probably be my last comment to you since I don't argue with illogical people. Apologies that you didn't enjoy the novel. I hope you find a better read elsewhere.
sheesh this is ironic considering your username. I'm all for it🤣. I love trash destroying trash online. I know how humanity ends and spend my time looking at it's agents.
InternetSaint:I call it as I see it.
PeerlessLoner:sheesh this is ironic considering your username. I'm all for it🤣. I love trash destroying trash online. I know how humanity ends and spend my time looking at it's agents.
he's not really saying you're white, he's saying your story feels like those written by white people.
CarlosDr3vna:White people??? I'm half Mexican, half Hispanic. Also not sure what the race of the author has to do with writing a story.
I'm not trying to defend anything, but why's this racism but when someone badmouths chinese for their low quality novels everyone just agrees?
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It's impressive how the 3k moments in your feed consist of unpleasant comments and 1-star reviews, I don't understand how there are such unhappy people, you hate your life so much that you feel the need to do less to other people. Another thing I noticed is that despite being so critical you don't have a story of your own, ironic.
Victor_Venegas:It's impressive how the 3k moments in your feed consist of unpleasant comments and 1-star reviews, I don't understand how there are such unhappy people, you hate your life so much that you feel the need to do less to other people. Another thing I noticed is that despite being so critical you don't have a story of your own, ironic.