Review Detail of DaoistojZfIq in Transmigrated Shadows

ok to start you writing is great not errors or mistakes, but they way your writing leaves much to be desired for one just 3 chapters in and the story fells more like a long winded narrative intro cut scene it is all over view, i wouldn't be surprised if your having problems continuing because another problem is that your too fast pace with the storyline because with the first 3 chapters alone you have fast-forward like 3 in universe months in a few chapters, you have to add details and switch to a in this moment type of writing not the past tense type your doing know, this is good you could do better so that why I'm pointing it out to you yell at me if you want but someone's gotta, you're character hasn't really been defined yet so if anything slow down and do like a flashback arc to the beginning where you do everything in greater detail and like a date system where chapters are actual days or points in time think young justice time stamps on screen type thing, this way you can flush out the beginning again in more detail and by yourself some time so that you can add any changes to the current storyline and switch up pace and make it better, think Deadpool and ironman movies that star in the middle but go back and do the beginning agian to add in details and meet up at that point again then continuing the story