The Nascent Bloodline is a story set in a world where humans with extraordinary abilities, called the Nascent Bloodline, coexist with the Paranormal humans. The story begins by setting up the history of the world, explaining the origin of the Nascent Bloodline, and their eventual decline. The narrative then moves forward 100,000 years later to focus on a young boy named Egon. The first chapter does an excellent job of establishing the world and its history. The concept of humans with incredible powers living among others is a well-explored theme in the fantasy genre, but the author manages to put a unique spin on it by focusing on the Nascent Bloodline as a dwindling race. The story of Tragon, the last Nascent Bloodline survivor, and his heroic deeds is gripping and adds depth to the world. In the second chapter, the story shifts to a new era called the "Infinity Era," where technology has progressed significantly, and humans have gained knowledge from an unknown species. The introduction of Egon and his mother adds a layer of mystery and intrigue to the story, and the sudden attack by mysterious creatures raises the stakes for the characters. The author's writing style is engaging, and the pacing of the story is well-balanced between world-building and action. However, there are a few areas where the narrative could be improved. For example: Show, don't tell: The story relies heavily on telling rather than showing. To improve the narrative, focus on showing the characters' actions, emotions, and surroundings through descriptive language and immersive details, rather than simply stating facts and events. This will create a more engaging and vivid reading experience. Pacing: The pacing of the story could be improved. The transition between scenes and the introduction of new characters feel rushed. Consider slowing down the pacing and providing more context to each scene, so the reader can better understand and engage with the story. Overall, The Nascent Bloodline is a promising start to a fascinating fantasy story.

Before I start nitpicking, let me just say, this writing is like a donut - it's got a delicious premise with a clear filling of conflict and characters with potential. And the icing on top is the tone and atmosphere that's so on point, it's like a party in my mouth...err, mind. But wait, there's more! Just like a donut that could use a bit more sprinkles, this story could benefit from the context I guess. It's not really a big thing to be clear, but with a bit more clear context, it's a really smooth read. Anyways, Loved your descriptive writing. Keep up the good work author.

I think it's a good story with wonderful word building. I like the character's and like someone else mentioned I would focuss on adding more dialogue in chapter one: create a scene where some things are explained in a setting. Other than that I like this story :D keep up the good work

I 'm loving the pace of this book, the plot is excellent. This is undoubtably fantasy at it's best. The author must take time though to proof read before publishing. There are notable errors in chapter 1 where the author says, "Egon had never seen such a creature", the line is misplaced as it comes before the attack by the creature upon it's first appearance and can confuse readers. Otherwise along with other errors of diction not take away anything from your outstanding work. You just need to proof read your work, and keep writing, I 'm impressed by your creativity and am cheering you on.

I have just read four chap and I gotta admit this book has a great dialogue and it's literally blowing my mind how the AI works,the author has a wild mind.. superb novella savvy..good book...good book

Egon is a good character, the story is really good so far, I've added it to my collection, when more chapters drop il will binge read them. keep up the good work author.

Okay, so I like your story, especially the idea that the protagonist is the only remaining Nascent bloodline. You have a nice plot and a good theme. Chapters 1 and 2 are already okay since you've put a lot of description and enough dialogue between the characters, making the reader really know what's happening. However, in Chapter 1, I feel like it lacks dialogue and relies too much on descriptions. So, I suggest that the author writes more dialogue to balance it out. Your story is good, so keep it up, author

Awesome book development, nice plot although just few chapters but still captivating, good job author.

Hlo fellow novel readers, this is great and good novel with everything from Writing to story. But is has far too less chapters for me, as I already have caught with latest chapters. Can anyone recommend more novel like this as I only have one in my mind. But it also just started and has less chapters but got a great potential. If you wannna check it out. Don’t forget to like my review if you find that story good. Name Holographic Conjuring Syatem Hey, don,t forget my like on this review. This book got 2 chapters for now but still great so far.