Review Detail of Riley_23 in Darkness's Mate

I will start with the positives: 1. It's a breath of fresh air. I was getting tired of tragedy so seeing a main character with good relationship with her father was so refreshing. 2. No unnecessary expositions. It was straight to the point. Unlike other stories I've read recently that has very long chaps but most of the words were filler. I hated that so much. (It's a more personal reason than anything so there's that.) 3.We were given a hint about the main character's backstory and about her inner conflict. Not all of them at once, but a hint. You get the idea, right? So if you like MC with secret identity then it might up to your alley. CONS: 1. Grammar/tenses 2. Misuse of punctuation 3. Pacing All the cons can be solved with a good editing so keep it up, author.