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MÖGENThis doesn’t look like translation. It’s more like English speaking newbie imitating the translated recent Immortal trend. It’s not bad, although the pacing and story development could use some practice. Seems a bit rushed and thrown in your face. No time to connect with the characters. He needs to analyze how some successful books pace their plot lines and imitate that until he’s ready to develope his own style.