The world design and story is well laid out. The characters have personality which draw you further into the storyline, which can be a little fast paced, so strap in. For the author, I would suggest re-reading through and making the dialogue a little less stiff, or more natural, by breaking up the dialogue with action tags and replacing words like them or there with more dynamic verbiage. I think this is one thing that's making the pacing feel rushed in some places. I'm looking forward to seeing the aura system being more fleshed out!
Sharyanna
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