Review Detail of JasolC in Worlds of Atlan

Hey guys I'm a new writer trying to bring my imagination to life. This is an idea I've been sitting on for a while and I finally attained the discipline (lol) to put the proverbial pen to the paper. Please comment and your honest opinions on the story (please be brutally honest if possible) I'm here to learn and sharpen my craft. This series will be ongoing so stay tuned!!!!!!!!!