It's an interesting premise I must say! The development is a strong build up to a soon powerful climax which I have yet to read. The design of the characters is superb. I love the details and description of each scene and scenario. I'd say the only thing you should do is break up your paragraphs and characters quotes. that's just about it. Besides that I've enjoyed giving this a short read!
Rin_Rose7
Liked it!
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