Review Detail of TheFailedOne in God Aim

Take my words as a passing wind for I have only skimmed through your work. Separate your paragraphs such that they contain 2 to 4 sentences depending on length, otherwise it would be too taxing to read. Apologies for not reading the entire story. Write well and don't hesitate to ask for help from other authors in the official discord server of inkstone. You can be a better writer.