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The writing quality is pretty bad English wise but the formatting is surprisingly nice and makes the bad English a lot more bearable. It's pretty much the author's take on "Pocket Hunting Dimension" which don't get me wrong I don't disapprove of it at all. On the contrary, I'm really happy about it and hope more authors can stop trying to reinvent the wheel because much like this, "Pocket Hunting Dimension"'s setting and plot can branch out a lot more. While that novel had a goofy MC with a harem someone else can make a very similar one or one that is based on the same kind of universe and cheat and make MC colder and more calculative. That was a long rant so I'm going back to the review. Although the formatting is nice it is still pretty messy. It's fine to have a side story in one of the chapters but we've barely just begun with the actual main storyline and MC is still exploring his cheat but all of a sudden we get that chapter with the Alexander guy. Basically what I'm saying is that I think we need some more chapters with MC, getting to know him, the people he interacts with, and cultivation shenanigans before we go into side characters and their backstories. MC being a transmigrator is a pretty big thing but is mentioned in passing... More details on the cheat would be nice. Describing his environment more, describing the refinement of his body more. I think it'd be really hard for the average reader that hasn't read "Pocket Hunting Dimension" to really understand what he's going through with the whole meridians and stuff and cultivation-related stuff like "spirit base". It's really fast paces so far and stopping a bit to 'admire the view' would make the story a lot more enjoyable in my opinion. TL: DR - Writing quality is pretty bad and I'd prefer if there were more descriptions of the cultivation process and MC's environment. Everything else looks good to me. Would recommend 👍

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Thank you for the review. I'm not a native English speaker , English is my 3 language so the writing quality is bad. As for character development and story I'm still thinking slowly. I plan to improve my writing style.

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As for PHD part , story is kind of similar cause cheats are almost same. If you have played Immortal Taoist game then you can understand a little. Oh as for harem I'm a love failure guy so no harem. There will be one FL who will help mc from time to time. Thank you for reading till now and in future