Review Detail of NakedApron in They called me FIVE

The constant mix of present tense and past tense is reallly realllllly annoying. And after reading like 4 chaps, I still don't know if you intended to write things in present tense or past tense. Other than that, there's not much to badmouth regarding grammar. As for WOrld and character design, they're very very interesting. Everything's explained in a quick, no-nonsense manner, and you can see the characters' personalities oozing out from the pages. Some passages read in a bit of an exaggerated manner to emphasize plot points and character traits, but it's nothing too overbearing. As for story dev, I rly can't say much at this point in the novel