I think the plot is a bit rushed. World building is a tiring process but it's necessary, especially for the quick transmigration plot like this one. Character design, it's not just about appearance but also personality and their quirks. You need to explain their background and behavior clearly. There's many errors in writing. Maybe use a line or "****" to separate between characters point of view or different set in the story. overall, it's a little hard to read and enjoy. sorry.
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