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Your story was good with a well-developed plotline and a great flow. However, at times, the dialogue lacked vivid descriptions. For instance, when the characters were talking, the author merely wrote what they said without describing their expressions or movements, making it seem like it was all talk. Overall, I enjoyed the book and think it has a high potential to become famous with just a little editing and revision. I also enjoyed the characters, so good job, author. By the way, here's a little suggestion. It's okay if you don't follow it since we all have different writing styles🙂 Instead of writing it this way: "Dhruv Yelling: HERE! I'M UP HERE" Rupesh: oh! You are there! Yeah Bhaiya What happen? Why don't you write it this way: "Here I'm up here," Dhruv yelled, trying to catch Rupesh's attention. "Oh! You are there!" Rupesh exclaimed, looking up at him. "Yeah Bhaiya, what happened?" he asked, curious and concerned. You can add more description to show the way the characters are talking.
THE 7TEEN: LET THE PAIN EXIST
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MÖGENAntworten1
Thank you for your honest feedback! I've received similar criticism in the past and I understand that my unconventional writing style may not be for everyone. However, my intention was to create a cinematic experience for the reader, which is why I use a script-like writing style. As a thriller, I strive for a fast-paced and information-dense story, which is why I avoid excessive descriptions and encourage readers to interpret the scene for themselves. I am aware that some readers prefer more clarity in character dialogue and emotions, and while I don't plan on changing my format completely, I will try to incorporate your feedback. Thank you for taking the time to read my novel and for your support! ❤️