The story has potential! The plot is conventional and well-developed though the author will need to distinguish their story through exploring the world background a bit more, offering more insight to the characters and taking up the writing quality by a notch. The grammar and writing quality was fine for the most part except some awkward phrasing and the occasional grammar mistake. In the first few chapters, the story also has a problem with long paragraphs that need to be broken down into smaller ones to make it more digestible to mobile readers. Keep up the good work!
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