Review Detail of Ymonnie_Forde in I Don’t Want This Bad Ending

Item: I Don’t Want This Bad Ending
Rating: 3.6

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As the author/ translator you should pay attention to your pronouns. Half the time I wonder "when did she start talking to a girl?" When in fact she's speaking to a male. Sometimes I forget that Gab is a boy because all the pronouns you use are feminine. The world building needs work and the grammar also needs working on. All in all its a good story. It's just a bit confusing sometimes with the errors

I Don’t Want This Bad Ending

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Thanks for your review 😉 I still have a long way to go in terms of writing but I'll do my best to make progress in it. I'm currently doing a lot of research on how world-building works, as I want to describe volume 2 as clean as possible. And thanks for telling me where u got confused. I'll go back to see the previous chapters and try to polish it. I hope you enjoyed my book. Thanks for supporting this novel 💓

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