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Reading this is what having a stroke feels like. There is hardly any explanation or structure to anything that is going on. Its extremely fast paced and jarring. From the first second the mc is introduced (no description, he was just there apparently on some alter that was not explained?), he is in conflict. His system makes him invincible and upgrades him for everything he does, including dieing. It also gives him martial techniques that are really rare and powerful (I think? The classification system is messy so I dont really know what is what). Oh he also has a lottery system that... works somehow... to give him anything from grenades to other things? It takes points, but the quantity of points taken and item pulled appear to be completely random... I literally cant tell what is happening. Just got to a part where he is eaten by a giant green ape that is horny for the Mc's sister. This is just after he killed a bunch of people with that grenade from earlier... nothing about the syatem is explained, nothing about the world is developed, the mc is not given a description (maybe he was, but I missed it?) Overall its a cool idea, but there is literally no structure or context to anything that I have read thus far. I wont be continuing either as I cant get past the jarring sequences of events that are given no explanation. I suggest you find an editor or two author. Perhaps flesh out your world a bit before throwing readers into the derp end.
Upgrading to Become Invincible.....
DragonNecromancer
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Hi, I read ur Review.... and tnks for that. U r correct on some points and wrong on some... Like: 1. u say there was no exclamation for skill stages or cultivation, But if u carefully read the chapters its has... 2. U say System give him exp, skill and upgrades for everything, but if u read this novel title it was (Invincible Upgrading system),so he have to upgrade for everything. 3. If u read carefully u will see the lottery points was not random but it doubles everytime mc spend but yeah the item was random, but it's a lottery bro what u expect from it. 4.About the Gorila part, bro i don't understand what is the problem there , mc just fire a granade in his territory with a bang, and u expect the Gorila to stay in his sleep.5. And about world development if u expect to have a chapter with world area and countries, it will be given in the story with the story on going. And lastly i have a request plz read the story start to end with no skiping for mis understanding.... Thnk u.
Hi, I read ur Review.... and tnks for that. U r correct on some points and wrong on some... Like: 1. u say there was no exclamation for skill stages or cultivation, But if u carefully read the chapters its has... 2. U say System give him exp, skill and upgrades for everything, but if u read this novel title it was (Invincible Upgrading system),so he have to upgrade for everything. 3. If u read carefully u will see the lottery points was not random but it doubles everytime mc spend but yeah the item was random, but it's a lottery bro what u expect from it. 4.About the Gorila part, bro i don't understand what is the problem there , mc just fire a granade in his territory with a bang, and u expect the Gorila to stay in his sleep.5. And about world development if u expect to have a chapter with world area and countries, it will be given in the story with the story on going. And lastly i have a request plz read the story start to end with no skiping for mis understanding.... Thnk u.
I have a question when it says "congratulations host has been killed" does that make him get exp when he dies?
DragonNecromancer:Hi, I read ur Review.... and tnks for that. U r correct on some points and wrong on some... Like: 1. u say there was no exclamation for skill stages or cultivation, But if u carefully read the chapters its has... 2. U say System give him exp, skill and upgrades for everything, but if u read this novel title it was (Invincible Upgrading system),so he have to upgrade for everything. 3. If u read carefully u will see the lottery points was not random but it doubles everytime mc spend but yeah the item was random, but it's a lottery bro what u expect from it. 4.About the Gorila part, bro i don't understand what is the problem there , mc just fire a granade in his territory with a bang, and u expect the Gorila to stay in his sleep.5. And about world development if u expect to have a chapter with world area and countries, it will be given in the story with the story on going. And lastly i have a request plz read the story start to end with no skiping for mis understanding.... Thnk u.
