An interesting story enjoying it so far. 1) just don't change the personality of the mc. He is a bad type guy he robbed innocent people of all their money don't make him a hero type suddenly. 2) don't change the personality of mc while he is talking with a girl. Like making him stupid, risking his life for a girl he doesn't know (he is evil, not some stupid hero) 3) avoid using plot armor too much like he fights a guy stronger that him and he suddenly gains power boost or something like that 4) don't make make a girl in love with him out of nowhere.
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