Review Detail of Arcturus420 in Resonance ​-a Mobile Legends Story

To be honest, the lack of punctuation marks and proper capitalization is killing me. XD Anyway, I see some potential here in the story, but I think you really need to slow down the pacing and not make it too cliche. Estes immediately saying that they will grant the teenagers omnipotence? That's rather cheesy, if you ask me. Good luck! Oh, and can you review my story in return? Criticisms allowed! https://***.webnovel.com/book/13796941806379005/Mobile-Legends%3A-The-Untold-Story-(515-Contest)