Review Detail of Sani2341 in Mystical Encounters

So to get the biggest issue out first: while your spelling is great (which is already a step up from a lot of stories on WN), your Grammar could do with some improvements all in all, or the first few chapters just need a slight revision if you already got better. The worldbuilding so far has been quite interesting and well done, although I personally dislike some of the videogame-like aspects (i.e. A Rabbit 'dropping a rare Item'), although they may decrease over time and jsut be a bit of early installment weirdness.