Review Detail of gusdefrog in I’ll reach the stars and moon for you

Thankfully the synopsis has nothing to do with the story yet. I really don't like the scene described there, so I hope it never does... Despite the lack of / misuse of tenses, it's pretty understandable while reading. However, from chapter to chapter the characters actions don't seem continuous, and as far as I can tell, all of the attractions are purely physical? My impression so far: a very intelligent (but socially confused) girl who has just finished her schooling, is still crushing on a transfer student that she met in highschool. But keep practicing. The flow of the writing isn't bad, so as your world and character building improve, and you get used to the oddities of English, you should be able to say what you're trying to say eventually.