Review Detail of QiuYin in Amoré Pettite Fleur

There are quite a few mistakes here and there so make sure the read through and edit. I like the background but you need to give more details like how they look like, the age of Lilly, etc. to make it easier for readers to visualise the story. Next time, maybe you can try to slow down the story a bit more to explain about their surroundings as it gets confusing if you don't.