For starters the chapters are really short. Hope its because its the initial ones but they should be longer. Characters are alright but since we cannot see them their features height special quirks must be described in details using words and their expressions to amplify the situatiin and generak character. The story is alright but i hope it will be weaved in a intringing and appealing way. Best of luck.
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