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starking

Lv7

CooL

2017-08-28 BeigetretenUnited States
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  • starking
    starkinga month ago
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    okay first off wow that was really good chapter I don't know if spelling errors were happening but it's not like I look at that hard or care too much I look at the content and that was a really good chapter I like the first person perspective you gave and the fact that a man who rushed up on the wall like that still is it's pretty cool it's most of time they died by the hundreds before they got to the wall anyway something I'd like to see in the novel is probably more dealings with the king and his Queen after all you haven't really shown those characters very much anyway just please keep pushing out more chapters I know it's hard but I really enjoyed this book

  • starking
    starking4 months ago
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    to answer your question yes I think you are dragging on a little bit it's a good story though so I am enjoying it it's just it would be better if it could move on a little bit

  • starking
    starking5 months ago
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    I'm probably going to give you about a week to give me more chapters if you haven't by then then I'm probably going to drop you out of my library

  • starking
    starking6 months ago
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    you are a very good writer you're able to elicit emotions with your writing very well and I am very impressed the only issue I have with you is you take too long to put chapters out but wow you are really good and thank you for all your hard work

  • starking
    starking6 months ago
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    I know this is a story I know it's your story and I'm not bad mouthing you however I have to say that was too easy good guys when they have to defeat an artificial intelligence it's always giving him trouble usually almost killing them and it resurges up again and most of time kills a loved one or two but in this story all the bad guys has to do is walk into a building like it doesn't even have security and shoot at it and oh sorry raise hands and then shoot that's it that's all he's got the bad guy wins I'm sorry but that's just not really fair

  • starking
    starking6 months ago
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    I'm enjoying your novel very much and I do give you Stones when I find the chapters interesting usually you asked for a review so I will try to give you some input. one I think he should come up with his own fighting technique using his doctor skills he'll take out opponents where they lethal or non-lethal. if he was so knowledgeable from his past life he should know about certain drugs or skin care products that he could make and then have patented and sold making extreme amounts of money makeup as well skin care and makeup are billion dollar Industries. third even if he was living under a rock in his past life he would know about certain disasters that they would publicize on the news in the past life several different instances such as when Hurricane Katrina happened the corruption was so bad that they couldn't maintain the dams to release water which caused some flooding you know about bombings and plain disasters now I know what you're thinking if he knows that what about it what good is it well for one thing he could simply call the FBI anonymously and save New Orleans from some flooding if he knows about airplane disaster he could tell them anonymously something's wrong the bomber is going to happen he would tell the police anonymously these are just some instances I can come up with off the top of my head I'm sure you can figure these things out and flush them out a lot better than I can right now. and lastly I just want to say you're doing a great job and please keep up the good work also please make more chapters quickly it's to much to have to wait a whole week for one chapter

  • starking
    starking6 months ago
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    I just read from chapter 1 to to this chapter since like 2 or 3 days ago and I had to say you are an excellent writer you've Blended them out of the characters and the Marvel and the Star Wars Universe very well and I am enjoying the book and please continue writing I want more thank you

  • starking
    starking7 months ago
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    it was a great chapter and because of that I'm giving you at least two stones congratulations

  • starking
    starking7 months ago
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    well written good job

  • starking
    starking7 months ago
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    it's a great novel and I'm enjoying it please continue also I might not leave reviews very often but if I like to know enough I will give it Stones so your novel will be getting stones just let you know great novel thank you