M7md_Star

ok first things first it's a good work but is it amazing then no far from it it laterally took me 50 something chapters to see any kind of development from anyone other than the main character we didn't get any glimpse of any enemy except bioblast the more i read i try not to cringe and like most of the mha fanfics out there of course you included momo and hado in this somehow probably going to make them both his main love interest and probably midnight too somewhere along the line like the power systems you put are one of the most versatile but you didn't take advantage of that you could have copied some reference from hxh like gon rock paper scissors or kilua electricity

i know this fanfic ended like a year ago but to me it was really good not amazingly good but did its job good and my thoughts is that i think the author rushed to finish the fanfic out of stress of handling writing two fanfics at once so he took his chances and decided to finish it abruptly like really going to space dude you couldn't make a better ending and the whole stealing quirk felt wasted you know and overall it just felt like your rushed the last 30 chapters but you did build up a good climax although you fummbled the last fight It was an average read

honestly I am glad i read this fanfic it's nice to see someone innovate things not like all the other fanfics who slap system templates everywhere hoping it makes a good story he actually portrayed how these characters would genuinely react if they were real and anime character honestly 5 stars

honestly it's good to know a side of demon slayer that has been unexplored like I did think it but who would have thought someone would make it like i always thought what if a demon slayer killed another demon slayer

well i know the author will never see this since he stopped writing 2 years ago but i just found another fanfic with the same concept but done way better than you I just wanted to for you to see that the other fanfic succeeded where you failed mesribly

it's all good but dude did you have to have all these chapters under a pay wall that's not cool bro not cool at all

I just can't with this author he made the same mistakes as his previous fanfic like first things first for the love of god stop involving the yaoyorzu family every chance you get and secondly it's stupid how you revealed that he had a second personality from the get go you could have made it a mystery and what was that scene where he beat up those other kids badly and momo just stood there didn't even say a single word just stood there that's just bad writing the reaction of the main character to having a second personality is too bland no emotions there at all when the mcs mom died i just couldnt stand it how he was ok with it all his reaction was too weak heck momo reaction to him waking up from a coma was too weak damn dude at that point stop writing

ok I have seen some comments from people absolutely trash talking this fanfic and i understand the rage but don't at the same time first i understand it was too bland ad the author could have done better buti guess in his situation what more could he do to make the fanfic interesting than adding gray like if we all speak the truth if he didn't do that we would have all dropped the series from the get go like what so special about the story if its just the mc trashing every body because he has a power stronger than everyone and another point is that is that iItgink he powered up the mc way too much if this fanfic were to actually cover the entire series then what more power up could the author give the mc at that point

I am sorry i dropped it early like really early i just didn't like it when momo became a love interest like bro u set her up as his sister I could understand neigiri but momo dude like why no include his mom mom too see how that's weird as fuck u had a really cool concept that really had a lot of potential but you just had to ruin it

honestly speaking I didn't read all of so I can judge but the thing that made me stop reading was when Melissa joined the hero course and had an iron man suit made for idont get me wrong I would love to see her character develop but it happened way too fast and made me think of how the mc advantage was taken away from him up to where i read the mc made a lot of the original mha problems and character drevelopment erased what was even the point to continue read when iIdidnt have anything to look forward to that i know