Goodorbad

The smaller a sun gets the older it is so this sun is way big

This is something that’s conceded useless to me i like being average not ugly or too handsome just average just imagine your life in a novel where everywhere you go you see so many people looking at you it’s just exhausting but the one thing I will change is intelligence it’s not to obvious of a change your body will not change, but your intelligence well it’s good the other thing like your body and face can be changed but not your intelligence.

If it was me I would have called the school that what a lot of parents will do.

Great writing but bad story first of all I don’t really like the main character hes stupid i don’t get why his intelligence are so low he questions everything he has no confidence and don’t believe in anything at all first of all he has a system that gives information about his stats but he thinks it’s useless which it is I don’t know why the system even is in this novel I guess it’s just for use to see how powerful he is that all the system is good for not only that a sword had to tell him how to use the system the mc is just a joke at this point. Another thing that makes no sense is that mc see that the blood line information on how to use it which a normal person can till that its overpower but no he thinks its useless like what.

Okay that’s make so much sense

Now there a lot of things that are missing in a logic way that is that the water they are showing with is dirty because in the old days everyone did there business anywhere even in the water but that not all animals too that why I was confused because why not create a boiling system to clean the water instead of just having the water that’s dirty.

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I am keeping this in check but is this harem?

Now I did reread my text I know that I made some mistakes but give me a slack it’s 2:00 am for me and I’m sleepy as hell.

Will was just saying but you do have a lot of plot holes one that I don’t like is when mc is saying that he will not do this but he does it anyway it’s annoying. The one I’m talking about is when he got the skill from the shop and was leaving but there was a explosion on the shop he said that he didn’t care but the next second he said that he was just going to see what’s happening but here the problem when he said that he was going to see what going on, it was skip to him fighting with the enemy I don’t know if I read it wrong or what but you should reread your novel and see what your missing or what to fix it help a lot.