She both so right and so wrong, Perhaps just right but for the wrong reasons

I enjoyed this a lot more than I expected, the 1st chapter jumped to a flashback back and out of it I think, felt too fast kinda gave me a bad 1st opinion, and I reread it like 4 and 10 chapters in, but so far I’m liking it. Honestly found the 8-9 chapters hilarious and adorable.

I don’t think reviled is the right word here, cause I think it means they look as though they are about to spit abuse back, but if that’s what you’re going for cool verbiage, but I’m imagining more a taken aback disgust. Like appalled, astonished with disgust If they are reviled, 1 sister would probably have to calm and coax the other. Which kinda happened later, just not obviously. Sorry, I like the word and failed to be concise but I think there are better word to react to his pigheaded perversion.

Honestly while not super common this happens on the real world, the neighborhood I grew up in had dollar stores and no groceries, my dad bought groceries from a place near his work. The dollar store had smaller portions and were often near or already expired, it was ok for junk food, but terribly unhealthy for groceries. Basically pay more to get less once portion is accounted for and have it be expired and non-nutritious.

Sorry meant to reply to the ones saying there was nothing with partial agreement and conjecture of just that but I wasn’t clear.

“Where I read it, The translation was garbage…” So I assume there is a fan translation out there, but ya, very high rating for it, to have nothing and no explanation. I think this is my 4th time between recommendations and events to find a 0 chapter book though so I understand where you’re coming from it’s pretty ridiculous this gets published and put front row on a page.

Cause boys to daydream makes this make a lot more sense

There’s a bunch of comments on this paragraph which made me notice the glace instead of glance, yet none of the comments were about it, so Glace> Glance

I’m not sure if the wayy was on purpose or not but thought I’d just mark it

Companions’ Banner

Ya this is just like the 5th time I’ve been led by either read 10 min or by recommendation to a book placeholder like this. Webnovel needs to mark these in their algorithm

Uriel’s demise >chagrin?

I also remembered that the chapters seem to be cut smaller a bit which can make vouchers less effective, minor negative though.

His> her

Muzzle

Crepy

Honestly I was looking for a NPC story when I started reading, and it’s that, closer to This Game is Too Realistic than say Legendary Mechanic. The MC Murphy is a Transmigratior who ended up in a SteamPunk tech fantasy world, he gets a system that starts bringing players in, and is their gamemaster while he bluffs being the game-maker on the forums; and the NPC that gives them all there starts in universe. I’m waiting to see if the Worldbuilding fleshes out the world as cool as I am expecting. But I do find the forum and player funny, but what I want to see is the World and how it’s factions react to the players.

I think close there throats was meant to be something about sneaking, moving and/ or striking silently.

Gender pronoun

Partially 1st person maybe should be him instead of me?