Nah, this one isn't on me, though. You've seen Blue Lock that basically how Baro thinks.

bro, I know 😭. I can't lie it sometimes makes it hard to re-read what I've written.

yea, the pov thing at the beginning was a little much. Probably lost a few people there. but no worries, if my story is good enough they will be back, no?

Yeah, I am 😅. The amount of mistake I've made is telling, even grammarly can't save me. But that's why I'm writing stuff like this. To experiment. That's why I love feedback like yours, good or bad. Thanks

Yes, he is going to be kinda OP, but that is what I'm going for. I wanted to write something like, "What if Rin Itoshi was in team Z at the start?" I plan on making him the best, and everyone is growing and developing new skills to defeat him, but his is also growing. As for his emotional state, I've thought about that too. he's a loner yes, but he is a strong loner, so he will draw people to him and will slowly but surely open up.

honestly, when I started, I didn't know what abilities to give him, but I hear what you are saying. I will do a character sheet for him. And list his abilities next chapter.

😅my bad

thanks 👍

like what? Can I get more details on this review, please 🙏

My bad, it looks like my calculations were off. thanks for pointing it out.

That is so true. I don't think I'm going to do the double pov again any time soon. cheers, though. 🫡

yes, but that's after Kira gets eliminated, no? The game starts with 12 players. One gets eliminated, so you have 11 players. 300-12=288.

Well, he's a superhuman monster hunter with cat-like reflexes. so sort of like a slow, ageing medieval Captain America that hunter's monster. oh, and has like five basic spells. but you don't need to know about him. I gotchu. I'll tell you about him. 👍💪🦾👊

which guy?

yes.

about?

I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it.

noted. thank you for the advice 🙏

the colour

the car