That sounded more like a scold XD

The Story isn't really that unique but really immersing. the characters, the interaction is very real which is really a good achievement . The World background : Boy, you killed it. Its so well explained that I can imagine it very clearly . But now I will get to the parts I didn't quite liked , for starters the pacing is really slow for a first time novel ,I am not denying the fact that the story in your mind have this pace, But you should really increase the progression if it goes a little bit more faster you can catch constant interest of the reader. I do think the prologue could be better its pretty straight forward. That's all I have to say . I hope you take account of these points and try to improve your writing i really love reading these type of Novels Wish you all the best for future titles :)