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  • _Jackson_7764
    _Jackson_77648mth
    Antwortet auf SulSeraph

    As you said,the wife should be extremely dominant to the husband,and to other she should be a switch, Just make it so she doesn't get R'ped 1)And I think i can help you with your problem, make the wife strong and while the mc weak,yet a bit smart,using his smarts he avoids scenarios where they are abused .... (Ps don't make the wife stupid,like her iq can be a bit less than the mc,but her battle iq should be more than him) 2)you can also give him skills that can make others less vary of him,like others keeping there guard just a bit down infront of him?,like he can becomes friends with other people relatively easily?

    Ch 33 Announcement: Reasons and Eve of The New Story
    The Temple Of Lust-NTR
    Fantasie · SulSeraph
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  • _Jackson_7764
    _Jackson_77648mth
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    It is sad to hear this buddy, but it's alright, the way u started this story was fooking amazing ngl, but it fell down after a while (like after chapter 20 or sum?). The main problem as u mentioned, was the protagonist.... I would like to suggest some ideas, please do hear them🙏 1) don't go into netorare, there are thousands of netorare novels and mangas out there 2) make the mc submissive, he needs to feel despair and humiliation 3) single wife, harem in a netorase novel will feel inappropriate, not only will u need to change your focus from on wife to another, it'll be real hard for us to keep up with it, instead center alllll your focus into a single wife, and also (in a netorase novel where the mc is submissive, him being unloyal to his wife and having a harem will be like meh...ngl) 4) make the mc feel Absolute despair, like how u did with dan(in the first few chaps), he can't cheat with other women as well, he needs to be loyal 5) make the female lead more dominant, ngl aurora was a pushover, I would rather have a dominant female lead in a netorase novel than a submissive And that's it. It took me quite a bit of time to type all that so please do read it 💀🙏

    Ch 33 Announcement: Reasons and Eve of The New Story
    The Temple Of Lust-NTR
    Fantasie · SulSeraph
    detail
  • _Jackson_7764
    _Jackson_77641yr
    Antwortet auf theyasuke_

    Real

    The Temple Of Lust-NTR
    Fantasie · SulSeraph
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  • _Jackson_7764
    _Jackson_77641yr
    Antwortet auf Caveman21

    Ngl I agree with him, I too am not into yuri stuff, I like it straight

    The Temple Of Lust-NTR
    Fantasie · SulSeraph
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