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It’s going to be the apocalypse just from text overload!
Yeah, in my head I was thinking that of course the little lichen sprig would heal best in Gordon’s beast space. But I didn’t explicitly say this, so I just went back to chapter 3 and added a short scene where Gordon puts her in his beast space for the first time. Check it out. Hopefully, it will make more sense.
Good thought, I will edit it, to make sense. Check it out to see if you like the change, later
Harsh!
Shot in the heart!
Oh! Food… maybe I am hungry…
Anxious a little?
Sure, which social networking platform is the best for you? I will join.
The first chapter is edited. You might not like the edits, but take a look. I made the connection between her and her people much more explicit. Hopefully it keeps her one dimensional personality, while also explaining why the people don't care about her person worthiness. That is to say that Jace is worthy, but how could the people know this. Hopefully this is enough. I will continue to edit the other chapters to make it all seamless.