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Monosir

Monosir

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A guy who gives honest feed back and doesn’t hold back at all, but I’m still nice.

2023-04-17 BeigetretenUnited Nations
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  • Monosir
    Monosira year ago
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    Pretty good. Some spelling mistakes that need to be fixed, but are also rare to find. I mainly found them because I was quite interested at one point. The pace isn’t fast or slow and has a bit of information given at you in the beginning but latter on the execution was much better. Overall a pretty good start.

  • Monosir
    Monosira year ago
    Kommentiert

    Should also have*

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  • Monosir
    Monosira year ago
    Kommentiert

    Look at me*

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  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Verschickt

    Pretty good… I have one problem which is the spacing on the paragraphs, but you can easily fix that…

  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Verschickt

    Pretty good, it’s too fast pace for my liking but I wont lower the rating purposely because of that. Some of the paragraphs can be overwhelming and sentence variety could be enhanced.

  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Antwortet auf Monosir

    *amazing. Hate how auto correct works on this platform

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  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Kommentiert

    Love the story so far! The pacing is perfect for me and the world and story building is azmazing so far. Though the only problem I had was with Suzume but that’s fine. I’ll keep track of this novel.

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  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Kommentiert

    Erm, character development for Suzume is kinda bad. Improve it for later chapters

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  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Kommentiert

    Why is* not does

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  • Monosir
    Monosir2 years ago
    Verschickt

    Pretty good. Not much useless information dumps (read up to chapter 7) and pacing is great so far.