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I don't mean to be rude but did you intentionally make those mistakes or did you genuinely not realize you were making mistakes, because how, the punctuation marks are wrong, some sentences are connected with other sentences they shouldn't be connected to and finally a lot of the words in the chapter are spelt wrongly, please fix these issues in your next chapter and try improving the story itself a little more, overall, the chapter didn't do that well.