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Festus_Darko_1226

Festus_Darko_1226

Lv3
2023-03-20 BeigetretenGlobal
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12265mth
    Kommentiert

    I don't mean to be rude but did you intentionally make those mistakes or did you genuinely not realize you were making mistakes, because how, the punctuation marks are wrong, some sentences are connected with other sentences they shouldn't be connected to and finally a lot of the words in the chapter are spelt wrongly, please fix these issues in your next chapter and try improving the story itself a little more, overall, the chapter didn't do that well.

    Ch 1 CHAPTER 1
    THE Time Thief
    Urban · kataali
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12268mth
    Verschickt

    Am sorry but I think you should improve your writing skills

    JIRO'S INSIDES
    sci-fi · Maddox_Amalattey
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12268mth
    Antwortet auf Peace_Amanorwa

    This is not the correct book

    MECH WARS
    sci-fi · Festus_Darko_1226
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12268mth
    Antwortet auf Maddox_Amalattey

    Redo: grimoire system in the apocalypse

    Ch 27 0 TO 100
    DOMAIN MASTER
    sci-fi · Festus_Darko_1226
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
    Antwortet auf Maddox_Amalattey

    The way the fight is orchestrated makes it confusing

    Ch 9 Battle with the unknown
    JIRO'S INSIDES
    sci-fi · Maddox_Amalattey
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
    Kommentiert

    A lot of things are confusing about this chapter

    Ch 9 Battle with the unknown
    JIRO'S INSIDES
    sci-fi · Maddox_Amalattey
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
    Antwortet auf Maddox_Amalattey

    What do you mean

    Ch 24 JOHN'S AWAKENING
    DOMAIN MASTER
    sci-fi · Festus_Darko_1226
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
    Kommentiert

    If the crystal was red and it touched Darku's hand why was Darko burning. He would have gotten fire resistance as his element would switch to fire due to the crystal being red. Is that a mistake or on purpose.

    Ch 7 IT'S TIME TO SHOW HIM WHAT I'M MADE OF
    JIRO'S INSIDES
    sci-fi · Maddox_Amalattey
    detail
  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
    Kommentiert

    Why does the enemy name sound so familiar

    Ch 6 Don't Wanna
    JIRO'S INSIDES
    sci-fi · Maddox_Amalattey
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
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    Great story but the fights are too short

    Ch 2 HMMM INTERESTING
    JIRO'S INSIDES
    sci-fi · Maddox_Amalattey
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  • Festus_Darko_1226
    Festus_Darko_12269mth
    Antwortet auf Maddox_Amalattey

    Thanks

    DOMAIN MASTER
    sci-fi · Festus_Darko_1226
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