What should I change about this red eyed man

Thanx for your advice

Man I had changed my summary and I am going to add some gods like being to make the story more interesting. If you have more advice pls comment because of your advice I can see my book's are becoming better

Umm how many chapters have you read?

The main character is in the continuing chapters keep reading his name is Don Stephen and he is the son of Maclony

Bro can you please teach me. I want to improve my books . You can also give me an advice

Ohk I will see about it

I had made changes on my mistake now you can read from chapter no 1 and see the changes

Rewrite In which chapter you think we should do a rewrite . Waiting for your reply

I will see about it man

Ok then I will write a summary about it Thanx for your advice

Thanx for your advice I will try to improve

You should read the book first man