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ZenMaverick

ZenMaverick

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2023-01-13 BeigetretenGlobal
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    bro how many words are in there it felt like 5k or more

    Ch 2 Chapter 1: Unveiled Omens, The Arrival
    Crescent Veil : Chronicles of Intrigue
    Fantasie · 1001001sh
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    huh

    [$%^$D$^&#A$^TA$&$] [%^&$L%^&O$%^%S%T]
    Crescent Veil : Chronicles of Intrigue
    Fantasie · 1001001sh
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    for the first chapter it was good

    Ch 1 Prologue : The Veil of Destiny
    Crescent Veil : Chronicles of Intrigue
    Fantasie · 1001001sh
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    i gotta say it was impressive word choice you got there

    Little do they know that their interwined paths will shake the foundations of the world, awakening dormant powers and heralding a new era. In a realm where gods are worshipped and mortal tremble, Lucias and Nathan stand poised to weave their own legends, destined to shape the tapestry of their interwind fates. The prologue begins, and the stage is set for a tale of grandeur, mystery, and the clash of worlds.
    Crescent Veil : Chronicles of Intrigue
    Fantasie · 1001001sh
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    wow

    In the land of shadow and secrets, where the veil between realms is thin, a tale begins. It is a story woven in the threads of destiny, where the fates of mortals and the whims of gods entwine. Amidst the enigmatic dance of lights and darkness, a young soul awakens to a world of mysteries.
    Crescent Veil : Chronicles of Intrigue
    Fantasie · 1001001sh
    detail
  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    My thoughts:- you explained what the characters are way to soon although you leave the important things hidden it is just that early character reveal is a big thing make sure you don't do it for the next

    Ch -1 Character Detailed (Base)
    Crescent Veil : Chronicles of Intrigue
    Fantasie · 1001001sh
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    good start well balanced and detailed

    Ch 1 Chapter 01: Death
    The Inheritance Of The Supreme Immortals
    Fantasie · Sam_OverPowered
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    maybe

    "Kill me?" Sam frowned. "You, Julian? The guy who's scared shitless to even go to the principal's office wants to kill me? Did you hit your head or something?"
    The Inheritance Of The Supreme Immortals
    Fantasie · Sam_OverPowered
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    cause you killed his people man

    "Revenge for what, exactly?" As far as Sam could recall, he hadn't done anything to provoke this guy's anger, other than inadvertently making him extremely jealous.
    The Inheritance Of The Supreme Immortals
    Fantasie · Sam_OverPowered
    detail
  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    since when a car starts to hum

    As he ventured deeper into the shadowy alley, his senses perked up to an unusual hush that enveloped the surroundings. The only discernible sounds were the distant hum of passing vehicles.
    The Inheritance Of The Supreme Immortals
    Fantasie · Sam_OverPowered
    detail
  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    nope

    The city where this teenager resided bore a remarkable resemblance to New York, and you're well aware of how quirky and frenetic New York nights can become, aren't you?
    The Inheritance Of The Supreme Immortals
    Fantasie · Sam_OverPowered
    detail
  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Verschickt

    The writing quality is superb, with a seamless flow that keeps the reader engaged from start to finish. and also i like there is no system or regression on the story keep it up

    The Battle Cries
    Fantasie · sicksix
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    so far so good it is well written and detailed i like it but my thought just the drop the titles like act 1 and act 2 it give wrong vibe if you can drop it

    Ch 12 Back to Alku
    The Battle Cries
    Fantasie · sicksix
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Antwortet auf sicksix

    Thank you so much

    Nightshade of Unveiled
    Urban · ZenMaverick
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Antwortet auf Maeve_Lindley

    Thank you :)

    Nightshade of Unveiled
    Urban · ZenMaverick
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Antwortet auf Maeve_Lindley

    picture

    "Veil of Shadows," Kael muttered to himself, his fingers flying across the keyboard as he typed in the search terms. "Ancient dimensions... supernatural realms... encounters with mysterious figures..."
    Nightshade of Unveiled
    Urban · ZenMaverick
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Verschickt

    it is not bad story i very like the concept of your story its intriguing and fun love the characters nice pacing for some one who need to chill this is the best for you

    Summoned by a Pretend Villainess
    Fantasie · superAyan
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  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    Oh, she is still getting the execution huh

    Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen.
    Summoned by a Pretend Villainess
    Fantasie · superAyan
    detail
  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert
    Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen.
    Summoned by a Pretend Villainess
    Fantasie · superAyan
    detail
  • ZenMaverick
    ZenMaverick8mth
    Kommentiert

    pretty boy detected

    The man, whose hair is as golden as the sun and eyes as blue as the sky, with a face filled with beauty, and elegance that carries an innate magnificence befitting of a true royal, smiled gently to his guests.
    Summoned by a Pretend Villainess
    Fantasie · superAyan
    detail