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I don't want to be a dickhead so I will give 4 stars, but genuinely i don't want to give that much but it's your first novel so i gave that much to motivate you here are some of my suggestions 1- Improve the synopsis, it's bad I mean really bad, at first after reading the synopsis I don't feel any attraction or interest to go and read 2) Some things are confusing in Chapters you should mention thoughts and speak aloud abbreviations 3) And some mistakes like in the first chapter you didn't mention what race did the goddess suggest, If it's a mystery you should mention it that is, I hope you can take this positively
I like this talent
10 fcking billion
you are in a simulation just enter deep in killing formation and absorb
this divine body is quite good
cut that fucking foot and palm once you are stronger show them your blue star dragon Kingdom bloodline 😂😂