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I’ve read this novel but I feel like the mc would be better to off being born same year as Harry Potter that’s where everything kicks off and makes sense. Is it possible to do it again from that period?

Why don’t you do another novel based on a reborn younger half brother of vlad and Ingrid in the series. But the only cheat he has will be he’s watched like two seasons of the show and has the template of Vladimir Dracula from the movie and not afraid of sunlight. So he’ll be more powerful than vlad. Him and vlad will be chosen ones in a way.

I won’t lie it just feels forced the who whole novel even adding the mcs brother. I have a suggestion as none really tends to do this but make a another hp with being a twin of Ron unique as he could be magically talented but then don’t try to use advantages like I can build something or invest in stuff to get rich.

What is the point of wishes and even meeting a Rob. Just get straight to the story. You could have just stated before he reborn in his life he clicked a website and choose the only talent natural affinity and family side black then that creates the mc etc.

One thing you messed with wrong was having Harris and Harry for first meeting. Why does every HP fanfic have to follow or meet Harry let the mc do something different go to slytherin make friends there.

I don’t think the readers will think that way.

Keep the novel going.

I would say if you’re serious about I would start a new novel. Like the Mac being twin of felix the younger brother. Start from there the mid getting the memories around 10 and having let’s say cruyff template talent and that’s the only help. Up to you what you decide. It’s more creative than using ronaldo for everything.

Daoists1 I’ll be honest you’ve made two system football novel which isn’t really original. How about making it more unique. You’re clearly from Cameroon which I get. But how about making a novel without out a whole system and the Mc is just talented and gets a boost of one legend say cryuff templates from young to peak inborn in him but as you know to get good you have to train. Let’s say an mc born in portugal 2002 or 2003 and has a football family legend or cousin. His mum can be Cameroon and father Portuguese. That’s a good background

Author this novel has potential. I believe you should keep the pace slow for now and not rush it. I also believe that the Mac should be an Attacking midfielder rather than forward as if you think logically what brazil or Italy National team need is a midfielder as there are plenty of forwards. Plus as attacking midfielder you can still create assists and score goals. Also e reason why I said don’t rush is that this youth arc can create so much events like youth National team u12,14etc plus youth real life tournaments, international national youth tournaments. So don’t rush. I like how there’s no system and it’s proper detailed.