Winnie_jazella1
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This isn't my first book, however, it will be my most authentic book. It is inspired by being a young adult( which I am currently). I will be showing everyone a glimpse of being a young adult in Africa.
I just started this on a whim today.
Description. I like that.
You story has a good plot and it is well thought of. I encourage you to think outside the box with words. This will help you in the long run as it will enable your readers to feel and relate better to your characters. You seem to be using a mixture of Eastern and western forms of paragraphing. I advice you to stick to one. I have really high hopes for this book.All the best.
Eliminate the 'and' before the second 'months'.
It is a mixture if western and African writing influences. African novels also tend to have long paragraphs. If interested check out Chimamanda's books.
The story is quite well thought out. You seem to have a firm grip on the plot you desire and I am sure you will be able to continue executing it efficiently.
Just heard Selena singing this in my mind. Lol.
Suspense. I like that.