i love the way the author wrote this, it sounds classic.
A beautiful moon up high in the sky with whispers of a gentle breeze that will blow every now and then, the residents of Westeriu were preparing to turn in for the night, ready to caught up with their sleep and sweet dreams.
For now I will only comment it like this, keep it up. you have a room of improving this skill of yours! goodluck! In my opinion your story is good, it just lacks something in some areas.