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Nice setup for the next chapter.
While the prologue is a little slow, Chapter 1 jumps into action quickly. I'd like to see a little more of the boy before he recovers. I think the contrast between the inflicted boy and the astute man would make for terrific character development. However, the ML comes across as strong and wise, someone I'd be willing to follow. I particularly appreciated how much the father cared for the boy and the efforts he took to protect him. Keep writing. This story has a lot of room for development and surprising twists and turns.
What did he do to deserve such punishment? Nice setup otherwise. Fast read with plenty of detail.
Aw, I should be the one giving you gifts. You've been so supportive. It helps keep me motivated to write more. Thank you so much for everything.
Working on that today. Thanks for the suggestion. I see now the extra spacing isn't doing the trick.
Apparently, extra spaces between POV changes aren't working. I'll go back and add subheaders. See if that makes it clearer. Thanks.
My dear reader, you are my hero. Thank you for your corrections. I appreciate your eye for detail.
Welcome back. Love your paragraph comments.
Aw, how sweet. Thanks for enjoying.
Not at all. Yeah, he's one of those dads.