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Guess you are right 😁
That's why you kill your enemies on sight. Didn't anyone tell you not to play with your food? Same bloody principle.
It's not about high tech equipment. At that time and place, where interstellar travel is common, laser, plasma or even pneumatic tools should be at least a standard. A pickaxe in that context sounds as misplaced as discovering a hologram in a paleolithic cave depicting mammoth hunting scenes
Hi! OK, I'll try my best. The story is interesting and looks promising. I have several concerns, though. The least important being grammar and orthographic mistakes, such as to instead of too, some where instead of somewhere, the instead of there, e.t.c. for etc, etc. There are some punctuation omissions as well. I think it would be useful to pass the text through a corrector. Since you are just starting it shouldn't be too cumbersome. The more important issue I see from the start is that there are really confusing passages. Deities, or beings, talking among themselves without any context of who or where they are, for example. Or the moment the System came to be. I think some things could be rewritten, rephrased or corrected without much effort but with a big impact for the readers. I know you need to keep some information to yourself for later disclosure, but keeping information and being confusing are different things, since the latter doesn't promote engagement nor is relatable. I hope these clumsy words are useful to you 🙂 Cheers, mate.
See? This is the absolute lack of information I was commenting on before. Which restrictions are they? If they are broken, then there should be some information about them. Otherwise why bothering in showing a System Message?
I understand that, but even before silencing the notifications, the information given was almost none.
This is a really difficult review. The pace is fast. Action is good. Snu-Snu is good. A harem story that advances quickly. World development is almost nonexistent (I am at chap 81 right now, the limit of premium chapters up yo date). And there is a System by which, supposedly, the MC goes from really really weak to the strongest being. But here is where the difficulties begin. The System makes no sense. The strengthening mechanism is vague at best. Cultivation doesn't mean anything either. MC strength is measured in levels, but we can 't compare it with anyone. The System messages and interventions are the worst, since they don't provide any information at all. Mana, cultivation, levels none of that matters because there is no comprehensive structure behind them. We know they are there, but the author never bothered to explain. Maybe even he doesn't know how things work. I suspect he doesn't even care. Also, there are a few inconsistencies that are irksome, because they are important. All is piling up. The Author wants to tell his story and he won't let something as silly as logic and making bloody sense to interfere.
What's the point of the missions if he can't get any description?
Is there a correlation between levels and cultivation? Diana is a Grandmaster, how does her strength compare to his lvl 20, for example?
He was hugging Beatrice at the end of the last chapter, right? I don't understand
This is spiraling fast 🤭 The maid, his step mom, his sister, even the nun (if she indeed was the assassin queen in disguise), plus his two current wives. And we haven't reached 100 chapters 😅
Does Dual Cultivation equalize the stats as well? I imagine that it boosts the lower level partner. But does it affect stats as well, like Intelligence?
Maybe the System blocked his progress so he appears as less of a threat. If he looks weaker, then it's easier to underestimate him.
Ten gold coins! For a "modest"inn? That has to account for aggravated assault. At least.