Kyroru

You keep saying he isn’t Baku a girl now?

I’ll say it every time it come up in fics but teleportation like in start trek I would never use. I’m the firm believer that teleportation like that would kill the original person and a clone would be made on the other end with all the same memory so no one would know it’s a clone. So your not actually teleporting your just killing yourself and making a copy on the other end.

It’s the wardrobe for Narnia.

I would say for a summon summon grayfia from Highschool Dxd to replace his dying house elf. I

What the plot for them.

I mean I’m not saying it’s not interesting to read but story wise I feel it’s a little over the top and not that feasible. You could do other things during the events or even have the mc have eri participate in the mini events they have between the second and third event. It’s was just a little cring to me that when the mc shows up with eri everyone was just like, “oh? Ok this is fine.” Like it’s normal what he was doing. I’m not tryin go to put down your ideas and enjoy what your writing. I just wanted to give my little two cents and a little constructive criticism.

I don’t know if it’s just me but I think it’s kinda stupid to have him join in the event with eri. One it’s outing her in the spotlight for overhaul to find her and I just don’t see the teacher just letting them join in when it’s for the students.

This is a writen version of the doujin from deviant art that seems to be unfinished.