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This is good, if he find the childrens fighting pits and takes care of it himself it could be something that could potentialy give him a noble ship, or am i wrong? You can maybe give him a cool bastard targaryen name like blackfyre?? Give it a thought?

I liked the chapter, it was good even though it was a bit shorter. Anyway you’re going about this well, now you can have viserys make an inquiry about his birth, maybe make him question why he not only has purple eyes but targaruen features even though his hair is white, he should still have the targaryen beauty and the purple eyes and what would make things even better if aerion has the same quitcks as baalon had and then viserys notices. Give it a thought author

Naah man, come on dont do this g, you make him sound cruel

Thanks for the chapte bro, keeping is hingry leaches fed lol, is it possible for the chapters to become longer or is the work load going to be too much id you increas it? As always good chapter well done

So he’s viserys and daemonds brother? Thats perfect, it doesnt give him a position where he would be directly in line to the throne wich means no assasins after him but still a close enough tie to the royal fammily. I wonder how he’s gonna make sense of it all.

Hmm, author as much as i like this story and as much as i like where you’re going with this may i suggest that you dont turn the mc into some manipulating shit, because so far he has already bonded with emmet and he likes esme so maybe if he want for his case to be presented and them not act like hypocrites you could consider upping his standing the fammily you know? Give it thought just a suggestion yhis is after all your fanfictions, anyway thanks for the chapter and well done you’re clearly getting better at writing

Perfect, finnaly the story is picking up, i see you took my advice in rheanys, or thats what you were planning on doing from the start either way well done. Now im not sure what you plann on doing next, but if Aerion is going to the isle of faces i sugest showing him glimpses of the dance so that his goal could be to prevent it, but considering it would be more intresting to see the dance if dragons than maybe for him to get ready for the impending doom of dragons. I hope that was helpfull and onse again you cooked g, well done

Hmm i see a potential clashing, if they treat vella the same way they did in the movie wich im assuming they will, it will be unfaire to jack who they forced to turne into a vampire and that could lead to the cullens and jack clashing….do i got it right author?

The story is not moving forward because the questions we have are not being andwered, for example we know aerion id a targaryrn bastard but he ks not actively trying to find out who he’s father is. Yes he’s uncle said not to pry but for the story to move forward something diferent needs to hapen…maybe have him go to fight in the stepstones, there he could maybe befriend daemon or atleast be in his vesinity where daemon could look into his heritige Or perhaps maybe someon coud recognise his festures you know, maybe rheanys or corlys…give it a thought my g, and keep up the good work

I like the emotionale depth the characters have, the story is also progressing at a good pacing. But something im curious to find out is who his father is and how will the royale fammily react to aerion