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ISHAN_MISRA1mthKommentiertintersting he is , reincarnated this one is
This creature is the Realm Lord of the High Heaven realm. His name is somewhat long in the Elven tongue, but we will skip it and move on to important things. We also won't bother with the fact that before he came into this world, he used to be called Jason on the small spherical rock he called home. We won't bother with that for now.- ISHAN_MISRA1mthAntwortet auf ISHAN_MISRA
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np
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np just confirm the realms and just stick to it
The boy guessed that he was between the second and third kingdom, it wasn't anything that impressed him after being around people in the fourth kingdom who could easily eliminate this city from the map with a thought. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthAntwortet auf Zetronys
np just correct them if any reader points out as it's gets enjoyanble for latecomers
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np
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ooh no problem just it disturb the rhythm while reading and I can understand ur writing your first novel so i just feel like to correct these mistakes
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ooh then u can ask the reader to find them while reading the u can edit the mistake
The following day, Kayden announced his withdrawal from the gym. As much as he wanted to penetrate her now, she knew it wasn't the right time. He still needed to hone his skills further, and without a doubt, the competitive environment there would not allow a level 6 to survive for long. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthAntwortet auf Zetronys
ok but plz try to give depth to the details as it seems character don't pay attention to common knowledge
Kayden was certain that if he had done the compression from the beginning, he could have achieved a fourfold increase. His strength would have a ridiculous leap in performance. He would probably be able to beat Astolfo even with the difference in levels between them. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthKommentiert
yes , u see I can understand the empathise your attepmptto give side character some emotion by writing (all work go down the drain) but it should be more natural with the paragraph and interaction inbetween characters
"Do not even think about it." Along with this sentence, the boy felt the characteristic cold of steel on the back of his neck. It's over, all your training up until now has simply gone down the drain in seconds. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthAntwortet auf Zetronys
ooh
Before she could begin her next move, she found herself blinded by an incredibly bright light emitting from Kayden's hand. The boy took advantage of this moment to approach and give the beast a good blow on the back. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthAntwortet auf ZetronysCh 53 Murder
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plz explain power system
But the grand prize went to first place, who won a third realm mana stone. The pamphlet did not mention the name of this kingdom. Kayden had already noticed this in his daily life. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthKommentiert
author confirm the name of realm ,some time use 3rd mage rank and such but sometimes kingdom . It's gets really annoying and with mistakes of pronoun makes reading experience quite bad
The boy guessed that he was between the second and third kingdom, it wasn't anything that impressed him after being around people in the fourth kingdom who could easily eliminate this city from the map with a thought. - ISHAN_MISRA1mthKommentiert
gun ?? ?
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it's plane dumb not setback
Kayden was certain that if he had done the compression from the beginning, he could have achieved a fourfold increase. His strength would have a ridiculous leap in performance. He would probably be able to beat Astolfo even with the difference in levels between them.