bruh this guy just put himself on the pan and in the future Alice will cook him.

Alice according to author

Cuz he immortal we all know this he doesn't age

"smell ya later" Kinda sus

She looks like this

I mean a good way to get to a woman's heart is by food.

You sure 'you' used them?

Bruh

I don't know about that one chief...

This novel is a hidden gem. I would recommend anyone who is reading this to check it out. There aren't many chiche development. The story is refreshing told in a different way. The FML aren't just beautiful vases they are very strong not useless like other harem novels. From the look's of the novel there wont be like a 20 woman harem. The romance isn't bad it feel's real World development is pretty good The world has it's own power system and the MC isn't just this overpowered ret*rd. His thinking makes sense. I could say alot more but gotta eat but I would recommend you to read it (read at least 30 chapters).

It has potential if I had to say so. There are a lot of problems in this though as stated :- 1.The sentences are readable like you will understand what the mc is trying to say but there could be alot of improvement on some obvious mistakes. 2.Author in the beginning keeps changing his mind and keeps adding stuff in while something is happening. If I had to give a tip to the author is just have a general plan on what you are going to do with the story, like have a solid plan you can revolve around. 3.Story development wise it's decent like I can see what the authors trying to get to but not taking the right steps. 4. World back ground is what do I say it's marvel.... and character design is well Madara is Madara.... The plus point is as stated :- 1.The story is new so it's still changeable. 2.idk why but for me this feels kinda refreshing 3. I like the idea of where the author is trying to get to but not sure if he will get to them. 4. It's not cringy. 5. It has potential Things to improve from my pov 1 Get a editor or just learn basic English. 2.Don't just change the story whenever you like. It might not be effecting the novel now but it will if you do it later. 3.Post more like once or twice a week.

I think you should have made it so that Mc learned the language by observing a few people talking in english for a few minutes.

First thing it would be better if you did this in 1st person rather then 3rd person. It just feels weird

Nice

Ok so you're dropping marvel in this. Wow I am so surprised xD

Surprise me if you can.

It's very boring tbh the writing is good, stability of updates is good, story development non existence (bruh he is like "I wanna keep this peaceful life" he doesn't really have one to begin with). If I am being honest a tip I would give you as a reader is that make the first 10 chapters eventful so that you can hook the readers. The only interesting thing I have read is that he fought shiva that's it. Also yes Rias is arrogant but she isn't really stupid. I don't see how she would see him the same as how she saw issei. Plus it's way to easy for the MC like as a reader I don't see him having any troubles anytime soon.

I mean the novel doesn't have many chapters as of right now so it's hard to tell if it will be good in the future but, right now the novels pretty good. The mc was a bit naive at first but he is changing slowly. I would recommend for you who ever is reading this to try it.

I think anyone one would get bored after about 2 weeks of having powers like Ren so I don't see how he felt the same excitement for 2 months straight.

ok